Bearwood Owl1 Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Well done Ryan. A very well written piece. The pictures were fascinating too. I spotted a couple of typos - it's a dance troupe - not troop. A good editor should spot any of those anyhow. You're writing style in clear and incisive so I hope you are able to take it further. Get a collection of your best pieces together - a top 20 should be enough. Also get as many qualifications as you can. That's enough with my teacher's head on - back to marking exercise books... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tudders Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Well done Ryan. A very well written piece. The pictures were fascinating too. I spotted a couple of typos - it's a dance troupe - not troop. A good editor should spot any of those anyhow. You're(Your) writing style in(is) clear and incisive so I hope you are able to take it further. Get a collection of your best pieces together - a top 20 should be enough. Also get as many qualifications as you can. That's enough with my teacher's head on - back to marking exercise books... 'Your' not 'You're' 'is' not 'in' B+ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bearwood Owl1 Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 'Your' not 'You're' 'is' not 'in' B+ I don't think I deserve even the B+ for that so thanks! In my defence I've been marking books for ages and my eyes are swimming. I wish a few of the kids I teach could write like young Ryan here - he has a fair talent for it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrickyTrev Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 As ever another well written piece with some great pics. Nice one Ryan. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lt109 Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 good read again Ryan, very well done. I also enjoy the photos. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tudders Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 I don't think I deserve even the B+ for that so thanks! In my defence I've been marking books for ages and my eyes are swimming. I wish a few of the kids I teach could write like young Ryan here - he has a fair talent for it. Defence accepted Yes he has.Hopefully he'll go from strength to strength,improve with age and make a living out of something he's very passionate about.He has undoubted ability on such young shoulders. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest foreverSWFC Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Nice one mate! I'd love to do something like that, must have been a great experience. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tha_knows Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Very good report lad, something that prat Paul Thompson could never produce... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheEnchanter Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 RYAN IS A WEDNESDAYITE Good read as usual, keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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